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Hello there,

Being a person who recently graduated from high school an dis now moving towards college, you have struck me. The relation the reader - of similar experience - receives is both refreshing and appealing. Binding both the piece, and the person as one, in a sense.

Your form was very clean-cut, too. It gave it a familiarity and emotive expression with such words as, 'college', 'autumn and 'leaves'.

Being a haiku (5-7-5), you avoided the common failure of hindered flow. I applaud you for that because it is always well deserved in a circumstance like such. :clap:

For the basic criteria;

Vision: Four because you had a very nice image and message to give us.

Originality: 3. You definitely gave your own spin and soul in this, I liked that - but, it is still a common subject.

Technique: No hindrance - perfect.

Impact: Like I said before, you struck me with this. It had a definite impact for me.

Thank you for your time and talents,
Tristan Cody.
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DylanSeto Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Student Artist
I actually wrote it for a blurb that will appear in the graduation yearbook, which is why its about this subject. Its max 400 characters so i figuered I'd write a haiku(it ended up being aprox. 60).

I think I'll actually submit it after reading this critique. I wasn't sure if i should before. Thanks!
TristanCody Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Student Writer
You're most welcome!

I am glad my critique allowed you the courage to submit. I am just honored to humility at the notion :3 :tighthug:
DylanSeto Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Student Artist
^^' hehehe
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