Being a person who recently graduated from high school an dis now moving towards college, you have struck me. The relation the reader - of similar experience - receives is both refreshing and appealing. Binding both the piece, and the person as one, in a sense.
Your form was very clean-cut, too. It gave it a familiarity and emotive expression with such words as, 'college', 'autumn and 'leaves'.
Being a haiku (5-7-5), you avoided the common failure of hindered flow. I applaud you for that because it is always well deserved in a circumstance like such.
For the basic criteria;
Vision: Four because you had a very nice image and message to give us.
Originality: 3. You definitely gave your own spin and soul in this, I liked that - but, it is still a common subject.
Technique: No hindrance - perfect.
Impact: Like I said before, you struck me with this. It had a definite impact for me.
Thank you for your time and talents,
I actually wrote it for a blurb that will appear in the graduation yearbook, which is why its about this subject. Its max 400 characters so i figuered I'd write a haiku(it ended up being aprox. 60).
I think I'll actually submit it after reading this critique. I wasn't sure if i should before. Thanks!